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There was a dead body on Sandie's back porch, and it was trying to get in.

She wrung the coffee out of the front of her shirt, made damn sure that all of her doors and windows were locked, and called Mike.

"Mike."

"Yeah? Sandie? That you?"

"You don't know anything about this, do you?"

"About what?"

"The zombie."

"Come again?"

"Mike, there's a zombie on my back porch. It's leaving smears on the glass door. Is it yours?"

"I... Could you repeat that?"

"Zombie, Mike. It's a dead body in a puddle of nasty, and it's leaving more nasty on my door. God, I can even smell it. This is one thorough job, man."

She edged away from the door, keeping an eye on the intruder beyond the glass. It was bloated and purple with decay, green and black fungus speckling its face. There was fluid coming out of its mouth and dripping from its nose. It had no eyes, and all indication of sex or age had rotted away.

"Robotic, maybe? One of its legs is about to fall off. You didn't sic one of your Cyber Derby friends on me, did you?"

There was a long moment of silence on the other end, then the sound of a slamming door and an engine revving.

"I don't know anything about it. But hey, are you going to be at home for a while? Can I come see it?"

"I sure as hell am not going out the back door. If it smells that bad inside... I'll put another pot of coffee on for you, okay? Come through the garage when you get here. Bring a shotgun or something just in case."

Sandie hung up and stuck her phone into the back pocket of her jeans, moving into the kitchen to refresh her cup. She went upstairs to change shirts, threw the stained one into the laundry, and washed her hands in the bathroom. The thumping and scratching from the back door was audible throughout the house, and it did not stop. She wondered whether she should be scared, but it all felt too much like a low-budget horror flick to be real.

A careful peek out of the hall revealed that the unwelcome guest was beginning to flag. The thumps were a bit further apart than they had been at first. Sandie cupped her hand over her nose and approached the door, with the reasoning that if it was going to get in, it would have gotten in already. The stink was nauseating.

"So," she said around her hand. "Are you here for my brains or what?"

The body clawed at the glass.

"You want a cup of coffee? Kudos on the makeup job, by the way, or whatever that is. It looks pro. Is that pig blood or something? You know you're going to be scrubbing my porch down later, right?"

The body hummed. It smacked a defleshed hand against the door, and the view distorted as the glass rippled with powerful bass vibrations.

Sandie fell back on her ass with a yelp, ruining another shirt with coffee.

"What the hell was that?" she demanded as the vibrations slowed and died. She picked herself up and crouched in front of the glass, staring into the creature's empty eye sockets. She received the unnerving impression that it was staring back. A dribble of black spilled from its mouth and splattered on the cement outside. There was half a grasshopper in it.

"Oh," Sandie said. "You're real, aren't you? Oh, God, you're real." That panic started to well up, along with the bagel she had eaten for breakfast. "Oh, God, oh my God."

She reached back and pulled the phone from her pocket, hit redial as fast as she could. Mike's phone began to ring. The body outside stared through the glass, its swollen tongue hanging down to its chin. It slumped sideways, pressing its shoulder against the glass.

Sandie gasped into the receiver, and there was a click.

"Sandie? You okay?"

"Right. No. Cops. Hurry."

"Wh-?"

She hung up and punched in 9-1-1.

The body hummed. It resonated, a clear, bell-like tone. Dust sifted down from the ceiling. The glass warped and undulated like a sheet of water, then burst inward with a pop. Sparkling fragments rained down amid a shockwave of sound.

The phone beeped, sparked and died, and Sandie was on her knees, feeling oddly mellow in the moments before she passed out.
Actually, it's not a zombie story. But you don't get to find out what sort of story it is for quite a while. ;)

I'm going to TRY to do my own little NaNo during December, since a change in the work situation this coming Spring will most likely take away ALL of my chance to generate new material - I'd rather have something ready to go for editing.

Mature content, do you think? I tried not to be too graphic, but decomposition is a messy business. Anyway, if you think it needs a tag, do let me know.

Part 1: YOU ARE HERE
Part 2: [link]
Part 3: [link]
Part 4: [link]
Part 5: [link]
Part 6: [link]
Part 7: [link]
Part 8: [link]
Part 9: [link]
Part 10: [link]
Part 11: [link]


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:la: DD? Thanks, guys! This makes my day!
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Given 2012-07-23
The Siren by =QuiEstInLiteris An unnerving yet intriguing start to a science fiction story. ( Featured by BeccaJS )
:iconladyofgaerdon:
I am insanely jealous of your ability to write a hook. I've been seeing that first sentence in your signature whenever I comment back to you and eventually I just HAD to see what was up. Your second sentence is perfect too, very engaging and straightforward. I do love long, flowery sentences (you've read my work, you know this), but this really works to keep the reader's interest. It's like being thrust into the middle of a story, but you still understand just enough to not be totally lost. Perfect combination.

I only see one thing I might change. When you say Mike's phone began to ring. it seems like a bit of as POV shift - after all, how could Sandie know, for sure, that his phone was ringing. :hmm:

Anyway, I'm impressed.
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First of all I'm highly impressed by your creativity and originality. You left me speechless from the beginning. Me (the reader) was thrown exactly into the story and it felt so strange yet amazing and realistic at the same. The gore you described in such a great fashion filled my mind. Decomposition is a messy thing indeed although I don't think it needs a tag.
Back to the story, you had great vision being able to describe Sandie and her behavior in times of panicking and despair.

I can see that you managed to create a great view of a decimated body, a black humor (starting with the very first line) that impressed me. You are talented and seem highly specialized on in-deep details
Great job!
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arbon777 Featured By Owner May 23, 2017
Huh, this showed up as a recommendation on my own Gesshru series. I think I see why. Not to scour through the rest of this.
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aquibdoescalculus Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2016  Student Digital Artist
Thus is awsm... I wish I could write as detailed and interesting as you...
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014   Writer
I say the same as Bark. I'll have to buy this book as well. I anxiously await each section already and want to own it finshed. Thanks.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Professional Writer
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It ought to be finished this year. My early estimate was July, but now I have absolutely no idea. >>;
But it will be finished. 
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014   Writer
:thumbsup:
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014

I remember first reading this a while back, but for some reason, never commenting. (Please pardon my lateness.) This is, simply put, deliciously original. You are quite the inventor. Immediately I was invested in Sandie, in her situation, and by the end I was hungry (excuse the pun ;)) for more. 

I shall definitely be checking out the rest of this story. :)     

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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Professional Writer
I'll pardon your lateness if you'll pardon mine! :blush: 
Many thanks! I've been stuck on it for a while, but I'm planning to really throw myself into it over the course of May.
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Bark Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013  Professional Writer
This is going to be another book that I MUST have!
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Professional Writer
o__o Oh, wonderful! 
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you so much!
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WolfSelkey Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

:0 This is really cool, I'll definitely be reading more ^^ I love your characters and the way you do the dialogue especially :D It really shows their personalities clearly.

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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Professional Writer
^^ Thank you so much! I've got eighteen chapters of this up on DA. The last chapters I'm saving for when I (hopefully) have it published some time next year. :3 
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WolfSelkey Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh cool :D Well I'll definatly be on the lookout for that, it looks like it's going to be a great story so I wish you luck with the publishers ^^
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
Congrats on DD :nod: On Part 14. Quite addictive. Nicely done. I don't think I have any overarching criticism, mostly just small things here and there throughout.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks! I enjoyed writing this. I'm hoping to have it published some time this year.
I'm always happy to hear criticism, though, even small. :)
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JKHolmes Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist
I love the first sentence. All of it is brilliant though.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Professional Writer
<33 Thanks.
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4defyinggravity Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Reminds me of The Walking Dead. Well done!
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Feelin-free Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
OMG -Retch- Hate Zombies
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Not a zombie. ;)
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Feelin-free Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
OwO
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Christiana-Rink Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Forgot to comment the first time I read it...xD but I absolutely LOVE how unflappable she is until she realizes it's not a joke. Reminds me of my mom. That woman could see you walk in with your leg torn off and tell you to "Take and advil and walk it off."
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Professional Writer
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Sort of based on my mom, actually. She's the only one I know who could find a zombie on her back porch and be pissed off that it made a mess.
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Christiana-Rink Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Dude. We have awesome moms. <3
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Heh, totally.
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thatenglishguy Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
Interesting...
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
^^ Thanks!
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thatenglishguy Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
Welcome :-)
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Sianofthedead Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"There was a dead body on Sandie's back porch, and it was trying to get in." Och that is SUCH a great opening line!!! Creepy yet playful and just instantly grabbed my attention.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
:heart: Thank you so much!
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Sianofthedead Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome! Apologies if you've already answered this but how did this idea start? Was there a particular moment or specific thing that inspired you?
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Actually, it was a comment I saw on Youtube. I was watching a really phenomenal music video, and someone had written "This guy cannot be human!"
The result: Musical creepy creatures, obviously. xD
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Sianofthedead Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh, okay now I have to ask what the music video was!
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Oh, heck. I don't even know which one, specifically. It was something by Vitas. [link] Male sopranos are amazing.
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FangirlFreak Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012   Writer
:iconilavplz: THIS IS AWESOME!!!!! I hate zombies/undead with every fiber of my being, and somehow I'm in love with this piece!! I love your writing style--makes me very jealous, indeed. But yeah, this is SOOOOOOO COOOOOOOOL :D :D :D
Congrats on the DD, keep up the great work!
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
^^ Thanks!
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fainting-goat Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very vivid description, and an intriguing start. You certainly earned that DD!
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks, love. :)
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MummyWriter Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow this is too god! :clap:
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Professional Writer
^^ Thank you so much!
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MummyWriter Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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MummyWriter Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! :D I'm working my way through the other chapters now and I love it! I hope you're considering having it published.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Considering, yes. Gotta finish it first, though. xD
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MummyWriter Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome! I look forward to buying it :XD:
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