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I remember you, quiet man,
plaidly relieved against a backdrop
spangled with motes of starry dust.
I remember you, blue eyes,
all black socks and white sweater,
and the way you used to eat mayonnaise.
I made fun of you for that.
I remember you smiling,
no tubes, no pumps.

And in the blue room, I played a game,
pretending I could keep you here
as long as I stayed awake, imagining
my breath sustaining you-
   in and out
      in and out
         in and out
      and once more.
But my heart cramps,
and my eyes are sore,
and this is not so much a poem
as a thinly veiled prayer
that you still guard me as I sleep,
though open eyes did not save you.
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Mood: Love =EveFromLove Oct 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Touching.
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=QuiEstInLiteris Oct 9, 2012  Professional Writer
<3 Thanks.
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=Gnewi Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:( I'm so sorry! I lost two grandparents in the last few years. I miss them both so very much! I can definitely understand....
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=QuiEstInLiteris Oct 9, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you. It sucks, truly. It drives me nuts when people say that it gets better. It doesn't get better; you just learn to work around it.
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=Gnewi Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So true! :(
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:iconculexknight:
always thinly veiled prayers
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~Panthershade May 23, 2012  Student Writer
I know how you feel.

I'll leave that at that and I am very sorry for your loss...:(

Beautiful and very sweet, touching and emotional. I nearly cried, not a bad thing at all however, I've been repressing a lot and this really helped.

It's good to get your emotions out through words on paper isn't it?
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=QuiEstInLiteris May 24, 2012  Professional Writer
:huggle: Thanks, love.
And yes, it does help. Not much, but it does, and every little bit helps.
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~Panthershade May 24, 2012  Student Writer
:hug:

You're welcome :)
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:iconcyarna:
This has uncovered a lot of repressed emotion in me.
This is really beautiful beyond words, I don't know how to express how this has stopped me completely in my tracks and made me think, not only of that which I have lost but all that I still have and cherish. Thank you, really.
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I'm also very sorry for your loss. This is a breathtaking poem.
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