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We can learn a lot from salt.

The chlorine atom is fundamentally lacking, longing to fill that gaping hole in its valence shell, and those bright bits of energy dancing in amorphous clouds around a sodium atom are just too tempting for the poor chlorine to resist. Chlorine probably knows that it has no claim to those electrons. It might lie awake at night for days or weeks in a fit of conscience, seeking alternatives before sending out tentative feelers and inviting Sodium to join it for coffee... It's a romantic comedy in minature, and I think that we can skip over the montage of dates and dinners and late nights on the couch in front of a forgotten movie, set to some perky but meaningless tune of the early Nineties.

It's only much later, once caught in the throes and tedium of a borderline-abusive relationship, that Sodium begins to understand the true nature of an ionic bond, begins to search and grope in vain for those lost luminous stars that Chlorine stole back in the early days, back when thrall and dependence seemed romantic rather than unhealthy. At that point, it's too late, and the bond is all but unbreakable. It takes a glass of water, a symbolic drowning, to dissolve the chains and allow Sodium to escape, bruised and empty, to seek a replacement for the energies and vigour it had never known were gone. It takes suicide-by-metaphor before there can be a rebirth.

And Chlorine, left behind, festers in its own toxicity and crawls yellow-bellied along the ground in search of a scapegoat to waste in revenge for the burning gap that Sodium used to fill. The anger is superficial, though, and I suspect that it masks such deep remorse, such willingness to give back those stolen lights, if only it were possible.

I suppose that what I'm trying to say is that I'm sorry.
One of those things...

Part II: [link]

O_o A DD? Thank you, guys!

EDIT: Hear it read by the lovely =SilverInkblot of Elocutionists!
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The suggester writes: Chemical Attractions, Part I by *JudgeNotNovels is a creative and thorough metaphor presented in elegant and striking prose. ( Suggested by OritPetra and Featured by Halatia )

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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi, I'm a reader for #Elocutionists! :wave: We're dedicated to lending a voice to great DeviantART literature, and I did a spoken word cover of your piece. You can listen to it here: [link]

If you like it, I'd love to add it to our group's Wordpress blog. What do you think? :)
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Professional Writer
;; THAT IS SO UNBELIEVABLY AWESOME AND I LOVE YOU FOREVER.
If I could make capslock bigger, I would. I love it so much.
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If you'll link this in your artist comments, [link] I'll submit it to the group :)
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Writer
Added!
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:la:
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Writer
<3 So much awesome.
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Morgana-Jones Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! Loving the metaphoryness!
Yes I know it's not a word... *it should be*
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Professional Writer
>w< Why, thank you.
I shall alert Webster's post haste!
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Azranielle Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2011  Student Writer
This is so lovely! I wish I understood chemistry better, to be honest... I feel like I'd appreciate this more if I did.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011  Professional Writer
<3 Thank you! Honestly, I thought it was really dorky, but it's gotten so much positive feedback, I can only assume that DA must be a dorky place. xD
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A7XFan666 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2011
Amazing, you have a lot of talent(:
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011  Professional Writer
<3 Thank you!
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A7XFan666 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011
Welcome<3
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GothKoala439 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The metaphoric way that you present this is just stunning, the DD is very well deserved! Great job!
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you! It was an image that had stuck with me since I first took chemistry, and I'm glad that I finally got it down on (metaphorical) paper. :)
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GothKoala439 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
lol, that's awesome. I love chemistry, but I never would have thought of it that way. :-)
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MagpieVon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so mad I was away to miss that this got a DD! Congratulations, my friend! Very well deserved! Though, I've thought that about many of your pieces.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Professional Writer
I'm mad that you've been away, too! But more because I've missed Silverwing. xD You really must get uploading again!
I'm making my way through your new chapters. :)
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MagpieVon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I've been working on Silverwing. It's just hard to balance that with work, and now with NaNoWriMo. Once November is over, I will definitely have more Silverwing up. Besides, the break is letting me soak in all these new ideas for it. I now know exactly where I want to go with it.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Professional Writer
Exxxxxxxxcellent! I look forward to it!
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eloquensartifex Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011
Gah, it's so good! I got to this from the Literature Anonymous group, but I see now that it got a DD. I'm very glad for that, because this piece is wonderful. The wording is consistently perfect, and picking something usually thought of as so concrete and factual like chemistry and playing with it so masterfully to make it tell a whole different story was just brilliant. That final line makes everything fall into place perfectly, and I thank you for sharing your work with everyone. :)
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you so much! You're too kind. :)
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eloquensartifex Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Any time, and nah, I'm just telling the truth. ;)
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MysticalAngel101 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. I love this. Partly because I'm a bit of a chemistry freak, but it just flows so well and seems so... realistic. :heart:
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011  Professional Writer
<3 Thanks!
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Panthershade Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011  Student Writer
AHHH *Wildly yells and dances around a bit* You got another DD?!!!

Congrats!!
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011  Professional Writer
<333 Thank yoooou!
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Panthershade Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:

You're welcome!!!

You wouldn't mind if i showed it to my Chem. Teacher would you?
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011  Professional Writer
By all means. :)
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Panthershade Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks :)
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icytemporalist Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Utterly Glorious! From a Chemistry point of view, I'm blown away.
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At least this is proof that Chemists do more than tell bad jokes...
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Professional Writer
I've got quite a lot of bad jokes, too! ;D
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icytemporalist Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
It's 'coz all the good ones Argon, right?
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Professional Writer
xDDDDDDDDDD Yes.
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EsotericAngel Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Congratulations on the DD! Brilliantly done!
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Professional Writer
^^ Thank you!
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EsotericAngel Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome!
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your-oceanic-eyes Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
This...
Is one of the most beautiful five paragraph stories I think I've ever read<3
You, dearest, are amazing.(:
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Professional Writer
Oh, you're too kind, love!
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your-oceanic-eyes Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
This is seriously my favorite short literature I've read on dA. You really deserve that DD.<3
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Jetman2045 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
Well, I can see your vocabulary isn't lacking.
Job well done.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you. :)
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LOKIforDREAMS Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2011  Student Writer
Interesting...... I do like it. Even though I only have half an idea what you're talking about because I never took a chemistry class....
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Professional Writer
Ionic bonds. One atom essentially steals an electron from another atom. And I read too much into it. ^^;
Thank you.
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