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The Texas autumn, breached,
pours forth cathartic drops,
an ecstasy of tears
to cleanse her dusty eyes of the agonizing fall.

The brow of Texas boils
in cloudy greys and thunder
amid coyote calls electric
down the city-slicker's spine
dropping low.

The breath of Texas chills -
a saw-blade through the heat -
and screams the cloud stampede
across the hills.

The voice of Texas condescends
to whisper in the huisatch
and whistle in the Spanish daggers
sparring with the mockingbird
to sing before she roars.

The mercy of Texas
is no relief -
this wild trickster goddess burns

then drowns.
:iconquiestinliteris:
We got that rain I wanted.
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:iconexquisiteoath:
Having never been that far south within the US I have no true knowledge, but I do feel that I know it from this poem, it's got a great sense of place and atmosphere. I particularly enjoy some of your enjambments.
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=QuiEstInLiteris Nov 28, 2011  Professional Writer
It's an intense place, to be sure.
Thank you!
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:iconexquisiteoath:
You're very welcome.
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~TheGreatSpyExperim Nov 24, 2011  Student Writer
The second stanza.
I like it.
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=QuiEstInLiteris Nov 24, 2011  Professional Writer
:heart: Thank you! I think that it's my favourite, too.
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:iconkay-march:
I guess, we know by now, at least you're living or loving Texas, or both...
Sometimes the burning heat seems like a living killing machine, the only thing to save me from insanity in every way it's the long expected rain
The breath of Texas chills -
a saw-blade through the heat -
and screams the cloud stampede
across the hills.
make by itself a poem on it's own
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=QuiEstInLiteris Nov 12, 2011  Professional Writer
The heat really is dreadful, but the drought is worse. :( We're still in need of rain, here.
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:iconkay-march:
yes... we all need the water in so many ways...
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~ForgedSignatures Oct 23, 2011  Student Writer
ah! Your words are addicting to me. I'm starting to see a pattern with your word choices :) :) :) haha...it's okay, I mean we all do it, I do it, its the sort of style we stick to. I simply noticed the "electric" word used here as it was in the other poem. It's not bad, and they both fit :)

skfmslakfns I LOVE "city-slicker" god. I am so jealous. Ever since I started playing the video game Oblivion I wanted to use that phrase but I could never really fit it anywhere so it remains in my not used pile of vocabulary :( I truly believe you use words well, that its not just nonsense thrown onto paper and called a poem. I see clear thought and emotion here and I'm so happy for that.

I don' t really have any constructive feedback on this piece, I really like it as is! :floating:
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=QuiEstInLiteris Oct 23, 2011  Professional Writer
Ah, thank you so much!
And I do try not to overuse my favourite words, but sometimes nothing else will do. :D
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